Comments : Not the climbing kind (syntuit) (HM)

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Michael, you little gem you.

    not the climbing kind
    ^^
    Well I would say the title was intriguing and was what drew me in but in all honesty (and I think you know it lol) I was just stalking your page and kept refreshing the page to see what was occuring ;) joking aside what a perfectly executed syntuit and as always you say so much in so few lines that I probably ramble about in a bloody lifetime. :)

    fingertips claw rock
    ^^
    This will hurt like hell but still we claw and claw to try and find what we are looking for in this case a love that doesn't work.

    trying to cling to a love
    ^^
    Love how you use the word cling here because we do don't we even when we know the 'love' is going nowhere because we think something will help change it but in reality it never will because if a love was going to be returned it would be already.

    that wants to let go
    ^^
    Well, isn't that just great because as I said earlier you say so much and I ramble like my new poem 'snip.' It does make me think of a quote though 'if you love someone let then go and if they were truly meant for you they'd return' something like that anyway.
    I hope this is far from literal.

    All the best, Em

    • 7 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thanks Em. Unrequited love is the worst!

  • 7 years ago

    by Phil

    So I saw Ems comment on this and thought wow, I have to read though I guess I already had with that wonderful comment but yes you are right trying to claw your way through that stone heart will only end in you needing plasters for those scathed fingers.

    PW

  • 7 years ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    I like the layout very artistic as always Mr. Michael

    but this is so sad...its hard to cling if it's you who left holding to it...

    5/5

    Gel

  • 7 years ago

    by Brenda

    Michael, this is quite the syntuit.The title was intriguing and then it was quite a loop when I read it. So much truth in trying to hold on to a love that is already gone. One slip and you are freefalling. Well done-

  • 7 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Dear Michael,

    I love this poem, because you said so much with so few words.

    not the climbing kind (syntuit)

    ^^
    Heh, I so admire the British for their sense of humour. Even with this seriously sad subject, you managed to find a title that lifts the spirits :-)

    fingertips claw rock

    ^^
    By using this metaphor, it is clear that at great personal cost, you tried to save the relationship.

    trying to cling to a love
    that wants to let go

    ^^
    Yes, that is how it goes, unfortunately. The harder you cling, the faster the other will run from you. Only in complete freedom will true love flourish. Trust is the key word here, without trust, you have nothing...One has to trust the other without reservations...as I trust our friendship to last forever :-)

    Well done,

    (((hugs))) xx Ingrid

  • 7 years ago

    by Augustus Black

    Yes, there are some people in the world who acts like this.

    Very true and interesting write.

    Very sad too.

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Michael

    This poem left a lump in my throat. It hit me square in the face as so many of your short pieces seem capable of doing; it's brilliant work.

    All the very best,

    Ben

    • 7 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thanks Ben, everyone. I think these short pieces are the product of spending too much time in my car.

  • 7 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    This is wonderful. So much in so few words that make mountains out of rocks loved it Millyx

  • 5 years ago

    by Jamie

    I really enjoyed this poem. As always even though this is an older poem, you told a great story from three short lines, and metaphors.

    I thought it was interesting that you used 'rock' here. I believe you are trying to climb into a relationship or perhaps trying to save one. But deeper than that, I believe you used the word rock because it is hard to do so. Of course you leave the readers imagination to ask what happened. Another use for rock could mean that they were rock or the person you leaned on for support.

    Sadly there is not a lot you can do when your partner decides to leave, you should let them leave. But you can kind of tell the love this person has, you are attached to this person but they want you to let go.

    Going from the title after reading the poem, I think it reads as this person's love did not want to climb out of the trouble your relationship had. You tried to cling to rock but unfortunately you ended up falling. Well done

    • 5 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thanks, Jamie. Love of another is the rock. If a person doesn't live you, it'd best not to cling to them.
      Thanks for your praise worthy comment.
      Take care.