I really feel the desperation, the pain. I like the repeated pleas, they work well to create the right impact.

Well done.

Michael

Hi I must say this is a great little piece. Lost love especially when that person was the sun, stars and moon to us can be unbearable for a awhile but we do get through it. Like Michael, I like the repetition because it adds to the pleading, sombre tone of the whole piece so well done.

Em

You have captured the true meaning of a broken heart in this sad yet beautifully penned piece. Every word, every line, screams of the pain of losing a love that once was treasured. I feel your pain in this reality based piece. Beautifully done.