Comments : Just stay away

  • 7 years ago

    by Jenn

    I really like this poem, but the first line doesn't flow so well.
    "Why you need me again?"
    I think I would have gone more of
    "Why do You need me again?"
    or
    "What? Do You need me again?!"
    Probably the latter.

    I love the final verse, because I believe we all have had that one toxic love in our life.
    The one You have to completely shut down for a while, to keep them from getting back into our hearts.

    Over al I gave You a 5. I felt that You did portray Your emotions here, and it was not badly written. But I would like to see more metaphors, and symbolism in Your poems. It really would give them a catchy edge.

    Jenn.