Ren,

Your poems often tell of hard-hitting, life scenarios that I simply couldn't imagine experiencing; this is another. It's brutal, raw, emotional and very hard to read. However, it's well written and fluently rhymed and wraps the reader up in a dark sort of cloud that can't be broken through until the last line.

Well done and all the best,

Ben

Hello again!
I am literally drawn to your poems, and this one really had me all the way with goosebums.
So heart breaking and sad to have witness the loss of a close one, especially one's own child.
Your words captured all the sadness. And the mention of the white little dress made it so more beautifully sad.
Love it!
~S

This hurts...its the most painful moment for a mother
to go through and to sit and see this will break even the hardest
heart..to have waited for a child all this while just to be taken
away in one go...heart breaking...

I can't imagine losing one of my girls...

My sweet Cowgirl...this is another heart-touching write from you! I agree with the others here, you really can capture us from the first line and grip us until the end. And it's always a wonder how you weave the story thru very well managed rhymes...which just flows naturally. And behind every poem that is related to what you do we could feel your sincere compassion and loving heart. It is in this instances that I love you even more!