I really liked this poem. It was sad and heartfelt. I think you could work on the flow of the poem though. If this is true my best to you and the families affected.

Very sad poem and well writen to, I love it, so many emotion feelings, and a strong meaning.

Keep up the good work.

Thanks for you r/c

-Josiah

Thiss is so sadd, like totally 5/5
you are very talented , i almost cried

Omg thats sad...im srry that happned...ive been in depressions before but ive never loost anyone i loved in death..im always here if u need to talk...good poem to..5/5

Full of emotion and well written.

Nici

Oh how sad but good poem it was great

Omh. this poem was soooo sad but very well wrutten.
i hope it isnt a true story but if it is i hope you are ok!
love jess XxXxXxXxXx

This is a very sad poem, its clear emotion so you can't mess with that 5/5

Omg.. this is so incredibly sad.. im so sorry bout wat happened.. it made me cry.. omg.. ur poem is reli gud.. the rhyme, the flow, and most of all the powerful heartbreaking words..
take care
Nouna
thnx 4 commenting on my poem

Hey...i love this poem!!....lol you made me read it like 800 times!! lol jk but i love it, its wicked good....5/5...
.:amanda:.

Wow that was a sad poem..and beautifully written as well.I'm sorry to hear of the deaths..Your an amazing writter, keep up the good work and take care.

-Russell-

Aww that I sad, I'm sorry they died, I know it can be half my family has died in the past 4 years

That is really sad and i'm sorry!!! Sometimes the best ways to get emotion out and to be able to deal with things is to write about it! Keep it up!

Marie

This is obviously a very sad and emotional poem, but it has great meaning. I'm very sorry for your loss, I can tell this poem means a lot to you, and I think it really has a lot to say in so little words...keep it up...
~speachless01

It's so nicely penned!
I am deeply moved by the subject and its elaboration.
Great poem.

Awwww... do u need help? do u still have the child? or... according to this poem .. was it put to rest? or did i misunderstand? it must be hard for ya... if ya need any help, i'm here for you. i know what it's like to be a single mother, even tho, i've never been one. i know it's hard, cuz my dad literally raised me... and it must be depressing... but, anyway, i'm here for ya!

big hugs,

michelle

If i could i would give this poem a 4.5.. i mean its better than a 4 but.. it has a few things about it that lower it froma 5.. one of these things is the fact that in a few stanzas there are lines that i belive are way too long.. it just makes, me , the reader skip around a little and irt throws the rs off a little bit. but i love almost everything else about it so i gave u a 5.. it so sad and sweet and powerful..she must have been a wonderful woman.. and i know she will be deeply missed...along with the baby...

Very beautiful poem. nice way of expression. it touched me deeply.

Unique poem, touching story. keep it up

Very good poem...5/5!
~linz~