Hun i am soo sorry if u hav lost sm1, i can ralate 2 this poem alot.
Its such a emotional heartfelt piece, def got my 5 vote keep writing an take care hun sarah x

Me too sorry as well
im crying reading it

I hope writing this helped you sort out your feelings. I know it always helps me. I really like the concept you have in this poem about "pride" in the one you lost. I think the stanza about the pall-bearers was the strongest section. Your rhyme-scheme is fairly simple, but not so repetitive, and in this case, i htink that's actually a strength. use the content to determine the form of the poem, not the other way around. All in all, this was a heartfelt piece, not necessarily meant to impress people with tricky style - you just wanted to get your meaning across, and I think you succeeded well. My only grammar note is that "bare" should be "bear." Good work, and I hope this poem helped.

What a well written poem about such a personal loss. You expressed your feelings about the loss of this special person so well ~ thank you for sharing.

Writing is so great for venting out thoughts....thanks so much for rrc on my poem :)

I liked this poem alot, I think it describes your feelings really well and alot of ppl can relate

keep it up :)

Ytffgh

Wow the emotion is super good. the rhyme scheme is off a bit with the stanzas with 5 lines, but its still good