Comments : Venting. Take:2

  • 16 years ago

    by firexdancer

    Wow, it was good, the flow wasn't completely smooth but i loved this line 'kiss a dream within me, so i live on in a fantasy' that was my favorite part of the whole poem, it had alot of emotion and strength in it as well, very beautiful but as i said earlier the flow was a little bit off so you might just want to go over it cause it feels sorta raw.
    5/5
    luv, gabriella

  • This had a couple of grammatical errors, but it's good. Except, there's not really a connection to the other one. 4/5

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  • This had a couple of grammatical errors, but it's good. Except, there's not really a connection to the other one. 4/5

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