Oh god.Paula,This is the first poem I've read that has made me cry.I literally had tears rolling down my cheeks.That was such an amazing,but horribly sad, piece.But trust me,That brown haired,greened eyed best friend would not be begging you,she would be grabbing you and telling you what a horrible mistake you were making.And if you didn't listen she would lock you somewhere so you couldn't get out and do that to yourself.Anyway its amazing.Your getting better at long poems.It deserves something much higher then 5/5.
Truly amazing,
Rado

I feel like crying again... this poem had such a tragic ending. It was so happy and care free at first but suddenly BAM! It all hits you at once and the story turns upside down. No wonder this is in the depression category. It's a tragic story about a mother-to-be.. I haven't ever read a poem like this before. It's so unique. Great job hun!!!! 5/5 <3 <3 <3 <3

~Kayla~

Very beatifull poem 5/5

This poem is beautifuly written.it almost made me cry!! ~shattered dreams~

The pain that this poem carries, the gloominess it sends, made my eyes full of tears. it made me angry at the harshness of life

how could you write such a poem that kills every joy we could have.

Good luck

Her Guardian

Wow the longest poem i ever read so far and i've never ever read longer poems as long as this though this one is deserves to be read by many. hmm.. i admire the words you've chosen and the imagination you've putted and i think you've consumed too much ideas on this one. But honestly, (for me) it sounds more of a story than a poem. the emotions are clear and vivid, the flow is okay. good job!

..You know its a good poem when the first couple of lines take you to another place. WOW. I am so speechless right now I dont even know how to comment.

"The wind blows freely rustling crimson leaves,as a youthful laughter fills the air.Her hair a honey blond
falling in long waves shimmered in the warming rays of the autumn sun.
A charming smile that was a little crooked crossed the glowing face of my first child.She was beautiful,
an unexpected blessing with the hair of her father,and the eyes of her mother."

It just started off so perfect to me. Everything about it was great though, not just the intro. Great job in the emotion...once again =}
Perfect 5/5

PaSsIoNaTe KiSsEs

Oooohhh was this your new poem? i love it. see you are a better writer than me. lol. and dont say no. oohh wells. i love it.

madd.hatter(aka maggie)

Oh Elly.
This is so, beautifully tragic.
It was like reading a story, but with vivid imagery.
Truely moving.
I often find it hard to read long poems, so they have to be able to hook me or my attention strays...

I read this twice.

Simply wonderful. Awesomely penned.
Very well done sweetness.

Elly, I started writing again, I've just submitted a new fantasy poem, I don't think it's up to my usual standard, but It's a start. ;)
It's such a shame. Writing is one of my favorite things to do. (but life has been a bit hard recently.) Not to worry, expect more from me soon.

Once again, well done for such a magnificant poem. You are truely gifted.

*cuddles*
Kat xxx

This is excellent i like this alot pains a very clear picture. what inspired so words i love it keep writing this is wonderful

This was sort of a mess. There was no flow and no rhythm. There weren't stanzas at all. Was this suppose to be a short story? The descriptions were nice and stuff but the structure was sort of well lost.
3/5