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  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    There no= there's or there is no...

    Wow...
    I truly love this, I can relate to it in a way. It seem that you really have a way with words. The message of this piece is excellently portrayed along with amount of deeply touching emotions expressed on a great way. Quite powerful poem.
    My favorite stanza is:

    - I just want to go away
    Collapse into myself
    And just hide-
    ^^
    Very effective beginning, it pulled me straight into the piece.

    Well done!
    Keep up :)