Fallen Angel.

by Crystal Gaze   Mar 21, 2008


Fallen Angel 08/03/20
By:Paula .C.

Can no one see her?
The tradgicallly fallen soul.
Does no one see the tears?
The ones that take their toll.

Can no one hear the screams?
That pierce her broken mind.
Does no one realize shes fading?
That there will be nothing left to find.

Can no one tell she died?
That days when she was torn.
Does no one know shes unloved?
That when she flies in death, no one will mourn.

The sad truth is that no one does
She is uncared for
But no longer does she weep, that broken angel has
SOARED
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Another rare formed poem from me. This was written in a very short time, and so I would like to know what you think, please comment and vote.

Thanks,
--Elly.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Mister 47

    Very nice writen , i like the questionary type ,i envy you can express like this

  • 16 years ago

    by Miranda

    This poem is amazing.It has a lot of emotion and depth.It was beautifully written.The ryhming didn't seem forced except for the last stanza.Maybe put something like she has finally soured or something.I don't know,just a suggestion. :) I loved it, just like all the other's.
    Keep writing,
    Rado

  • 16 years ago

    by desiring love

    It shows great emotions tell the haters at the top to stop hatein and get a life!

  • 16 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    I don't think the paint has dried on this one yet. It could use a little more emotion and words that may be harder to find than what was written. I did like it overall though.

  • 16 years ago

    by Anthony Duvalle

    This was pretty good it just seems like it needs more description and more emotion to it

    but the idea is really good

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