Submission date : 2009-06-03
Last edit : 2009-06-03
Maya ( F P C D )
Well, David....all the I's kinda dazzled me. If you were to rewrite it with a maximum of one for each stanza, the poem would gain from it, I think.
The message is intensely sad and to think of you feeling this way is hard on me, son.
I hope all will work out well for you and your girl and that she will realize what she will lose if she were to let go of you!
You have so many talents and such a kind heart and you have so much to offer to a girl *shakes head* I just don't get how she could have you go through such pain, sweetheart.
If I could take away your pain, I would...just know you will always have my love and support, David:)
* tight hugs*
mandy ( F C D )
That was very sad, but very beautiful. The emotions were amazing, 5/5!
- mandy :)
Gasttlee ( F P C D )
Wow! So sad, yet simple and strong. This definitely deserves a 5.