Submission date : 2009-06-08
Skyfire ( F P C )
Beautiful, beautiful writing! This line was especially my favorite: "Oh, darling, won't you tell me, / what happened to our dance?"
JustKristina ( F P C D )
Wow babe. This is amazing. . . but i guess which poems of your aren't? I think the end could maybe say "This is the end of the the dance" idk, i'm not as good at this as you are. I just think the end doesnt flow as well. . . but other than that, wow it was breathtaking. Tugged at the heart, because i know this feeling. Its so raw to me right now that it burned.
Keep it up Gabskey dear. I love you