Why so serious?

by She Loves Me She Loves Me Not   Jul 24, 2009


Why will nobody take me serious?
Can't you see I'm getting delirious?
Why can't you see beyond my smile?
I just want to feel like I'm worthwhile

I sit and watch the days go by
Hours by hours, sigh after sigh
Knowing I might never break free
Help me now, or let me flee?

You won't accept I'm living a lie
Life is nothing, I'd much rather die
The pain I suffer from everyday
I'd rather the reaper took me away

Life is a game, it isn't real
It isn't for me, it doesn't appeal
You really think I chose to be like this?
I love you all, but life I just wouldn't miss

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  • 14 years ago

    by Em

    Why will nobody take me serious?
    Can't you see I'm getting delirious?
    Why can't you see beyond my smile?
    I just want to feel like I'm worthwhile
    ^^^^
    Nobody takes people with depression seriously usually until they get help but I like the way you say ".... I'm getting delirious?" because it shows how emotional you are and how stupid they must be not to be able to recognise this. A smile is a smile to most people. Think of the good and then you will feel worthwhile. Powerful beginning as always.

    I sit and watch the days go by
    Hours by hours, sigh after sigh
    Knowing I might never break free
    Help me now, or let me flee?
    ^^^^
    When we feel depressed it feels like the days are so long and it's so unbearable that it hurts. You portray this by "hours and hours". I like how you say "sigh after sighs" because it goes to show how really depressed you're feeling and that everything you do ends in a sigh because it seems so hard for you. "Knowing I might never break free
    Help me now, or let me flee?" < flawless!

    You won't accept I'm living a lie
    Life is nothing, I'd much rather die
    The pain I suffer from everyday
    I'd rather the reaper took me away
    ^^^^
    People won't accpet you're living a lie because I believe they don't think that you are. "Life is nothing, I'd much rather die" < shows how truly hurt you are feeling as you'd rather die than get on with life. Very powerful words with lots of emoition.

    Life is a game, it isn't real
    It isn't for me, it doesn't appeal
    You really think I chose to be like this?
    I love you all, but life I just wouldn't miss
    ^^^^
    Love is the main reason that stops people commiting suicide as it means more to them than ending your own life. Another well written by you, 5/5. Em

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    I sit and watch the days go by
    Hours by hours, sigh after sigh
    Knowing I might never break free
    Help me now, or let me flee?

    *I loved this stanza, it was my favorite. One thing though is you don't need the questionmark after flee, you're not stating a question. I really liked how you wrote this. It was simple but also complex in it's meaning. I also like the use of questions :) those are fun. Another good poem hun. Nik*

  • 14 years ago

    by katie

    I realy likes this poem. i cryed(more cuz i didnt blink) but i like the ryme and it has a very goo flow.

  • 14 years ago

    by cataclysmicSoul

    Sorry but i have to comment again; i really enjoy reading your poems
    all these deep feeling that are shining through are really appealing to me
    very well done

  • 14 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    You are very good at writting this type of poetry because all of your emotions are honest, it's a very sad poem and youv'e portrayed yourself very well.

    The flow carried through well into all four stanzas and th rhyming was quite good.
    =] good job, take care

    ~NH

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