My life doesn't shine

by She Loves Me She Loves Me Not   Feb 4, 2010


My life doesn't shine when I'm alone,
I remain hidden and relatively unknown,
My future like a black highway at night,
I'm already half way to losing the fight.

Can't live with these uncertainties anymore,
Riddled with thoughts I just can't ignore,
My life fading fast and I have no control,
As I let self hatred tear apart my soul.

This world is spinning without me,
I just need the world to set me free,
Forced to stick it out and live a lie,
I pretend I'm happy, but don't know why.

I'm a star that has lost it's way,
Completely alone and totally astray..

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Any suggestions on a title would be great. Thanks

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  • 14 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    This so touched my heart to read... Lol. Maybe because I can relate... and have been there. A deep poem so sadly, but well expressed. Your poems also have great rhtyhm and rhyme that make them shine :) You're a shine :) Lol.... Thankyou for such a heartfelt poem, and wish you all the best...

    Lol,
    Olwin.

  • 14 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    A very emotional piece! the structure was perfect and all the stanzas flowed into each other perfectly =] The despair you feel is evident with every word you write and you portray it beautifully

  • 14 years ago

    by Addie Coleman

    Your title could be the 1st few/couple words in your sentence like "My life"

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