Submission date : 2011-10-12
Last edit : 2012-09-25
Roses and lilys ( F P C D )
I thought that it was an ok poem. I thought that it could have been a little better but it wasn't a bad poem. The wording was ok and the flow was a little off to me.
So I gave it a 4/5
Jessi ( F P C D )
This Poem, To Me, Is Defenitally A 5/5. If It Was Possible It would Be Worth More Than Even That.
Your Wording Is Sensational And I Thought Your Flow Was Spot On.
Incredible Poem! .. :)
Everlasting ( F C D )
This poem is fine, I like it. I also notice that you use stanzas and they were organize o(^.^o) ( cheering expression lol) this made happy. I enjoyed more the poem.
Khalid ( F P C D )
Great and though provoking piece. Each stanza gives an interesting story. I loved the four-line style you used. Awesome
Yakori Mohammed ( F P C D )
This is just so terrific. I love the images it drew in my head. So clear and the subject of freedom is wonderfully portrayed. We always need to find a balance between our happiness and sadness. Holding onto negative emotions, destroys the outlook of our thoughts. One need to stay positive as to battle any sort of ill feelings, that may cloud us. Our actions need to be of hopeful renaissance even if we're nursing despair.
Lets try and hide our sad traits but we can pour out our hearts, without bottling it all in. However, such is a release of pangs of vague miseries and doesn't need to be a facade to lavish gloomy thoughts on. With a relentless faith, determination, positive energy and a light of hopeful existence. One can surely break free of choked feelings and move on.
Freedom is our identify and we should always claim it. A great write and read. I really love this. Cheerio! A 5 as always.. :-) ..