The non-verbal me...

by Amreen

My shadow is like a friend,
which clings itself to my existence,
when the bright rays of happiness
perch upon the cradle of my life...

My shadow is like a friend,
which obscures its figure
when the shades of gloom
frights my sensitive soul...

Oh why do I need your silent presence?
when my smile spreads drops of delight around,
as I don't owe you a glimpse of gratitude,
when you cannot stay beside me
when I need a shade of love in the cage of darkness...

Your presence exudes the clouds of reminiscence of my friends,
who enjoy the freshness of rain with me like you,
but fear to cover me in their wings
when I am exposed to hardships...

I wish you could detach your existence from me,
and take away the hateful memories that reside in my heart,
so that the bitter memories of friends which resemble you,
fades away soon...

[ Written for a club challenge by Everlasting]

 

Submission date : 2011-12-05
Last edit : 2012-09-25

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Khalid ( F P C D ) at 2012-09-09

An amazing piece that immediately touches the heart, emulating any expert poet poems. It's really full of emotions. I loved it.

Something Diabolical ( F P C D ) at 2012-09-09

What a powerfull emotional poem which i enjoyed reading

i like how you compared a friend to your shadow. The choice of words in this poem is perfect and you really got your message across.. the imagery you have created is amazing.
I think everyone can relate to this in some way or another.

I wish you could detach your existence from me,
and take away the hateful memories that reside in my heart,
so that the bitter memories of friends which resemble you,
fades away soon...

was my fav part. Purley because i felt it held the most emotion

keep it up!
5/5 from me

PETER EDWARDS ( F C D ) at 2012-10-03

A very powerful piece Amreen!
As always from you, a Poem of the highest order!

Yakori Mohammed ( F P C D ) at 2012-10-28

Wow! The incorporation of shadow to the subject of the poem is very lovely. Beautifully described and the imagery is strong, vividly created. Its somewhat sad to always have a feeling of pessimism looming around one. Engulfing one in sheer abject despair. We get cuddled in worries of the unknown, uncertain what will shadow us further, to achieve that peace of mind.

Life gets us in duality of the positive and negative ventures. The 'shadow' is that hope that hovers around us. Which gives us a reason to live and thrive come rain or sunshine. However, this same 'shadow' distance itself from us when we're clouded with misery, fear and sadness. It appears to appease and gives us comfort only in happy and positive moments.

A good message of inspiration because i see the trait of hope radiating within. *claps* :-) ..

Rusheena ( F P C D ) at 2012-12-01

This is amazing! It's refreshing and soothing, despite its dark tone. Keep it up!



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