Sunglasses in The Rain

Grey skies and gathering clouds
dampen the brightest of spirits,
so what must they
do to yours?

- great use of the question here being placed at the end of the opening stanza. This works well for me in poetry as it makes me, as a reader, answer the question and therefore becoming more involved in the poem itself on a deeper level.

I watch
as once again you walk
along the promenade without a pause,
the sea spray adding to
the moisture
in your eyes.

- I like how you used the term "sea spray" adding tears to the eyes, this is such a unique saying, and is better than tears and rain cliche which can be overused sometimes.

Why do you stay?
Another pledged to life
with deadened heart
and loss of hope.

- these words are so powerful here, they really hit you hard, there is no happiness here, no hope, and it really puts an emphasis on the tone of this deep depression and despairing time.

Your pride?
perhaps a false impression
that what once was good
could be exhumed and worshipped,
instead of buried under
leaden dreams.

- this is so true that impressions can sometimes be deceiving, and what is shown on the outside is not always what it is inside. I like your wording here and how you add an extra dimension to the poem, well done.

I let you go.
To walk alone among the crowd,
and hide the tell tale mar,
wearing your sunglasses in the rain

- great ending, and also good way to introduce the title into the poem, which is a favourite thing of my own to do, to mention the title somewhere near the end of the poem so that the title has more emphasis too.

I think your title itself, and the idea of the poem is so deep, powerful and really creates a good imagery for that dark place, and how one can hide from themselves, and the world.

Good job.