Existence...?

by yourVeryOwnWastedTime   Oct 20, 2014


Each day i survive, i find it harder and harder to contain the feelings pent up inside.
fighting to stay alive, actually attempting to try...
if i said i was doing this for me, it would be merely a lie
the one reason i want to survive is the fact my few friends need me or they would die
i'd rather be buried alive than to be the reason my best of friends have died...
if it wasn't for them id already be non existent...
just another lot to be filled in a graveyard, just another dead peasant...
should i stop trying? should i let my parents wake up to a little dead present?
i try my best to love but i remain hesitant..
years broken of relationships have degraded me to my empty presence
with all this pain you would think i have learned my lesson
but it seems each day my strive to live continues to lessen
with each breath i take the unberable pain fuels my dead expression...

*may be adding on to this or futher editing in the future*

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  • 9 years ago

    by Ziad Assaad

    If I were you, I would not want any part of death...At least not until you've composed a compendium of your thoughts. Nice poem; leave your legacy through words.

    Oh, P.S. poetic license gives you freedom to write how you see fit. I do it all the time. Sorry, Mori.

  • 9 years ago

    by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-

    I dare to disagree with my fellow poets ( No offence James and Liz) but I am a stickler to the spelling sorry it's a good poem but I have that pet peve I like capalization in the poem it cannot win with errors it will win if it's perfection or near flawless that being said it's a good poem just I couldn't stand to read it that much for long since I see my past in here and it made me a bad poet

    -Mori

    • 9 years ago

      by yourVeryOwnWastedTime

      It is no problem, i appreciate your honesty. i will try to correct my spelling and such.

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    Wow, this is a really powerful poem. There is a lot going for it. First of all the message is really strong, you are trying and fighting so hard to stay alive. For your friends need you as you need them. The rhyming was also really good and to me didn't take away the flow of the poem. The non capitalization here works well, even with the "i's". I think you did this so you wouldn't bring attention to yourself, because this poem is not truly about you it's about your friends. Hang in there mate. Excellent write.

  • 9 years ago

    by Liz

    I don't think it needs editing. I just hope that feeling you have passes with time and you'll realize theres more to life. <3

    • 9 years ago

      by yourVeryOwnWastedTime

      Why thank you very much.. i will be fine eventually and hopefully. <3 <3 <3

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