Quest for Quiet

by Ziad Assaad   Oct 29, 2014


On a quest to quiet his mind, self-imposed exile was success for a time.
That time passed as his mind wandered, still, in search of peace within veins he withdrew.
Signing out, he signed on, unwittingly drawn into a game as a pawn.

On a quest to quiet his mind, dogmas and doctrines within he reclined.
In them solace, though temporary did find, but ever remained this quest to quiet his mind.

Navigating the mess his life had become, was second to seeking refrain, staying numb.
Growing in a recess in back, paid no mind, awaited a darkness with patience and time on a quest to quiet his mind.
In demon's arms embraced, he reclined, as slipstreams brought ease his defenses resigned.

The answers, it seemed, remained so elusive.
Yet, stands ever clear to a mind sober, and lucid.
Senses he had forfeited so readily, and complicit now prey to this force and the peace it elicits.

For a time he had bliss, and the trade it seemed fair.
In a flood of blood to the heart cast his cares, rushed a moment removed from reality and his senses.
Flashing the answers to life, it presented.
Deceptively setting itself up on high, as an idol now worshiped to quiet his mind.

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  • 9 years ago

    by Liz

    To edit, go to "your poems" on the right side of your screen. It lists all your poems with options to edit, delete, or feature. :)

    I also like the rhyming in this, it gives it an easy rhythm. And just an opinion, I think it would look much better without the /forward slashes/ , maybe just regular punctuation? I guess the slashes are easier, though.

    • 9 years ago

      by Ziad Assaad

      Thank you. I think you are correct. Forced habit from writing lyrics. I appreciate the time taken to, not only read, but also reply.
      I was never concerned with the "look" of one's writings. But having read through much of what is posted on this website, I realize that stylistically, the aesthetic of the work itself is important. Plus, the inflection in various verses could definitely use punctuation.

  • 9 years ago

    by Ziad Assaad

    How do I edit my poem? Anyone know? I used the wrong "its". Damn apostrophe.

  • 9 years ago

    by Dane Carpenter

    Best I've seen in a while. I love the abstract rhyming, don't see too much of that now days. Really captivating and easy to relate to in many different aspects.

    WD. :)

    p.s. Maybe use a repetitive or unique line in the poem as the title. :)

    • 9 years ago

      by Ziad Assaad

      Thanks man, Appreciate all criticisms. Look forward to applying them as I grow.

  • 9 years ago

    by Ziad Assaad

    Just titled it thanks to some friendly advice.