Endemic.

by Poet on the Piano   Feb 13, 2015


"I wanna be yours."

You're not at the other end of the receiver though, it's just my phantoms fidgeting at who can contort my words first.

I can't bury my heart beside you; your tombstone won't want my blessing. That thorny, temperamental rose you surprised me with should still be piercing me. But I pitched it across the retired river. It's dying somewhere outside near the sinful snow.

I'm sorry I didn't hold onto you....

I should've gone out with you to realize I need to stop chasing you.

You're not the wings I so desperately need...

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Written 2/12/15 @ 8:43 PM

inspired by Arctic Monkeys, "I Wanna Be Yours"

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  • 9 years ago

    by GB

    Your title drew my attention, excellent choice.

    You did intriguing job with the introduction, still if you don't mind, I'd like to suggest something here, it's neatly penned short prose in need for some flavor:)

    ~I can't bury my heart beside you; your tombstone won't want my blessing.
    ^^ I suggest replacing the word "want" with other distinctive word like "cradle", the imagery was pretty mature at the beginning but the word "want" is a very average choice to complete the meaning.

    ~ It's dying somewhere outside near the sinful snow.
    ^ Perhaps you need a comma here.

    Thank you for sharing, a pleasure to read.