Perdition

by Kakera   Mar 10, 2015


I heard her name echoing through the walls
that bound my dreams to growing decay,
and invited ruin to my creation
with vengeance in its breath

we were never more than slaves
to the anguish in our bones;
our love was crushed inside the closed fist
and betrayal danced on our open palms

O the futility, to even think about escaping
the balancing out of our presence,
though our consciousness will be erased as time
carves our names into crumbling stone

and though we flirt with the light,
all we know is the expansion of emptiness;

all we hunger for is perdition
to punish us for once having dreamt

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  • 9 years ago

    by GB

    The depth of writing made me read it again and again, it was more than fascinating each time. We have different views for life and destiny and your perspective here is more than interesting.

    Although there are few unnecessary "filling words" in some lines, still the poem flowing smoothly, and you know what grasped my attention, other than the creative imagery, it's the use of different tenses with emphasis on the passive tense, very well employed.

    I don't think you have to capitalize the beginning of the 4th stanza, just thought.

    Great read, thank you for sharing.

    • 9 years ago

      by Kakera

      I actually haven't thought about the passive tense part before. But now that I think about it, using a passive tense with emphasis for effect is definitely one of my quirks as a writer that is found in a lot of my writes.

      Actually, switching tenses is overall something I do unconsciously more often than I realize. It's rarely deliberate, but it's rarely a mistake that harms the continuity either.

      Anyways, thanks for reading and commenting!