Inner demons (palidrome- line by line)

by Brenda   Nov 8, 2016


I woke up happy today...
it's going to be good,
I can tell
the voices in my head
to not fight-
it's a struggle each and every day...
I can tell
one day these voices will win,
it's going to be so bad,
I woke up...

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  • 7 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    I may need some tips on how to do it brenda?! I wouldnt know where to start!

    • 7 years ago

      by Brenda

      It's weird, I was telling Em I almost start from the end and work my way back. At least that is what seems to work with me-lol.

  • 7 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Brenda,
    Very well written. this style of poem is excellent!
    Well done!

    • 7 years ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you Naomi! You really should try one of these, they are pretty cool.

  • 7 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Very clever, Brenda.

    Well done. X

    • 7 years ago

      by Brenda

      Thanks Michael, appreciate you-:)

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Brenda, like Ben I would not be able to do this or if I did it would take me ages and be rubbish haha. Anyway I do like this form, it's different but fab when done properly.

    I feel this is like 'oh I woke up' thankful for the day ahead but then realise that you have demons to fight and a daily struggle perhaps of being judged because of things... You don't have enough minutes in the day, something like that anyway lol
    Fab, Em

    • 7 years ago

      by Brenda

      Thanks so much Em. I'm telling you, you could totally do this. You almost have to think backwards to make it work. At least I do lol.

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Brenda,

    As sad as this piece is, I can tell you're having fun with the form :) This is excellent. I think it would be too much for me; I would sit there scratching my head and twiddling my thumbs for hours trying to make it read both ways.

    Brilliant stuff,

    Ben

    • 7 years ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much Ben! I am having fun with this. I wanted to write it as a palidrome and two sides of waking up. One being happy and one being, crap I actually woke up. You could so do this! Coming from the master of sonnets, I have nothing on you.

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