Submission date : 2007-04-05
Suicidal ( F P C D )
Beautiful poem! You sure can write! Very touching piece and so sad....you did a great job on this one!!!!!!! 5/5
Kristina ( F P C D )
Awww good job!!! this one is really sad and flowed pretty good. some points had bumps but it was great! also, some of they rhyming seem forced like you couldn't think of anyother word. but overall it was really good!!!! keep up the good work! :o)
xXx SeCrEt WiSh xXx ( F P C D )
I found this to be incredibly sad, and yet so beautifully written at the same time.
The emotion and depth you portrayed in this was overwhelming, without being overbearing, it really tugs on the reader's heartstrings.
The only thing I didn't like about this was that you rhymed ''to'' with ''to.''
But apart from that, I thought this was beautifully written, filled with such melancholy and still such a beautiful piece of writing.
broker ( F P C D )
You are really talented!
This is the second poem I am reading by you and it stands out too! What a gifted young man you are!!
waiting for him ( F P C D )
Wow!..great job!!..lots of emotion in it..i totaly cried......