My Dirty Deed

Hmm... disturbing poem. The content - of a depressed person asking a friend to kill him/her - is rather dark. That isn't a bad thing, though. However, I wonder if a different format would have aided the mood better. With such a subject, the general 4-line stanza layout seemed to take it down to the level of basic teenaged-angst writing. It's not what you said, just how it was laid out. Interesting how form can have such an effect.

Anyway, I rather liked the first two lines - they were very interesting and original! My one qualm with that stanza is that it's the only one that rhymes. Maybe you just cahnged your mind after starting off or something, but it kind of threw me off a bit. Besides that, the grammar and everything was good, except for the missing "y" in the last line - that might be sort of essential.

All in all, very interesting concept, and several creative spots!

I quite like this poem Katie. It's really good. Rather original in the way it's written. The flow was good, as was the word use. I love the first stanza, a great beginning to this poem. It was a strong ending too, with it tieing in well with the title. Well done. 5/5

Tammie