A Not So Pretty Ending.

by Crystal Gaze   Sep 18, 2007


A Not So Pretty Ending.
By: Marlanna, Kayla, and Elaine.

And just like yesterday,
And all the days before,
Today means nothing,
Nothing means anything anymore.

My suns and moons are all faded,
My hopes and dreams long gone,
I can keep singing but,
Theres no music to my song.

My note books are empty,
What happened to the words,
I guess they flew away,
Left with all the birds.

The autumn leaves are dying,
Winter is on it's way,
This empty heart has grown cold,
That's all there is to say.

A once happy girl,
Now scared and alone,
One that desperately needs help,
Getting her heart completely sown.

Gray clouds block out the sun,
The stars no longer shine bright,
Winters breath fills my lungs,
As I leave everything behind.

To me you where my everything,
My strength, My life force itself.
And yet you left me drowning,
Hear in my sea of doubt's.

You knew I wouldn't survive,
You knew I'd fall back to hell.
Your where my bloody life!
And now I'm left with haunting lies.

So I'll crawl into a dark whole,
As I so often crawl into a dark place.
And let the tear's fall, and soak,
My not so pretty face.

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Marlanna and Kayla: I would like to thank you both, for joining Idea's and talent, to create this poem. I believe it turned out well and look forward to writing with you both again. Keep writing girl's, your both super talented xoxox

-- Elly.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    Very nice flow and nice emotions that grace the page where you poets pen has been laid bare. I liked your work and find it a pleasure to rest upon your words. peace

  • 16 years ago

    by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA

    Now this is what I call a poem. This is really beautiful poem, although it's sad. Great job to those who wrote this. It's greatly put together. 5/5<---wish I can put more

    <mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    My fave poem by you so far! This was just amazing. The emotions were relateable and real.

    "My suns and moons are all faded,
    My hopes and dreams long gone,
    I can keep singing but,
    Theres no music to my song."
    ^this stanza was just amazing and so beautiful especially the last two lines.

    Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    I have never done a poem with anyone before.. I think it's really hard.. but anyway you guys did a great job in this great piece.

    Flow was flawless, keep up the good work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Tammie

    The beginning of this poem blew me away. The first stanza I loved so much, the way the words are put together read really well. The next three stanza's were great too. But from then on, the flow became a bit off and the rhyming scheme changed, so that threw me right off. To me, you can't change a rhyming scheme in the middle of a poem. Also, in the 7th and 8th stanza's you wrote 'where' instead of were. Just thought I'd let you know.
    But all in all, this was a good poem. The emotion was definately there, which is most important.
    4/5 for me.

    Tammie

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