Norhan ( F C D )
at 2009-07-08
Interesting, Alan, though slang is not really me. you know, the english. but then I am sure it sounds wonderful with music. so very glad you're back :) though would love to see you write something in a different catagory. and do let me know, would love to read :)
about here:
our jokes are stupid
And your style is bland
You aint nothing like me
Cuz everything I say is a hundred grand
can't you remove the ''cuz'' or even better, remove the ''cuz everything I say is'' and just leave ''a hundred grand'' ? was just thinking it would sound better...
Keep the writing :)
Deana ( F P C D )
at 2009-07-11
I had to smile when I read this AJ, It is "battling" at it's best...It reminds me of my kids at work...loved it!
xXxXhes the everything i cudve a ( F P C )
at 2009-07-20
Good flow. i could picture myself writing this kind of poem a while back. i like it. good job.
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