FountainsOfBlood ( F P C D )
at 2008-09-01
OMG I LOVE THIS SO MUCH! Actual tears man!! Omg this is so good courtney i llooovveee it! There's just nothing to say otherwise
5/5.
~FountainsOfBlood
btw, who was that written about? please pm me and tell me! I'm so interested! :D
Rikki ( F P C D )
at 2008-09-04
I must admit that you did say it was long, and so it is, far too long. I feel that this could have been almost cut in half.
There were a total of 16 Stanza in this poem made up in the following manner: 1 of 3 lines; 6 of 4 lines; 4 of 5 lines and 5 of 6 lines. It is all over the place.
The ideal is to have virtually all the Stanzas of an equal number of lines. There are exception to this as some type of poems do in fact have a varying number of lines to a Stanza but they must follow very specific rules.
Having said all that, basically I enjoyed the poem. I feel that you must learn to be more disciplined when you are writing, and think about what you want to say, and also how to say it.
Please don't think I am "having a go" at you, I am not for I can see that you have talent, just that you need to learn how to bring it out of you.
xKeepxHoldingxOnxAndxNeverxLetxG
at 2008-09-29
Ya about that i dont know about you sometimes my dear!! But this is very beatiful if we were ever getting married i would love these to be ours cuz i cried my love lol
<3''''
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