Dixiedaisy ( F P C D )
at 2009-08-11
Awww this is precious. Sometimes it seems that we just don't see eye to eye with our parents. I love the peacemaking ending of your poem. Very nice.
Luanne ( F P C D )
at 2009-08-11
You loved me with your silent words
Protective acts of war
When I thought I'd gone too far
You loved me even more
^^^
I loved the ending in this stanza Jenn.
You, my father, I, your daughter
Love held in between
Confusion turned to understanding
Chaos, to serene
^^^
This ending is beauty!
When we get older and become parents ourselves we begin to understand the difficult job our own parents had.
Though we were angels weren't we Jenn *winks* ... lol
I still shine my halo every now and then ... lol
Loved the flow in this piece and the words are very touching !
Wonderful read my friends
Anna Stephens ( F P C D )
at 2009-08-11
Ahh, Jenn, this is one very close to my heart. I didn't get to know my father until about 4 years before he died two years ago....just about the time we discovered we truly did love each other.
I surely treasure the few years we had.
Beautifully expressed!!!!!
Rachel ( F P C D )
at 2009-08-14
It is nice when families can get past their differences and realize what matters most - Love....
As usual, your rhyming isn't forced and the piece flows great. It is realistic and full of emotion. Definetly a piece many can relate to. Nice job!
Deana ( F P C D )
at 2009-08-17
Jenn, I truly love this write...I become tired of trying to decipher through metaphors and over-large words , this says what it means and creates real emotion! A refreshing piece! love it!
shaitorturedpoet ( C )
at 2009-08-19
Our silence isn't quite as awkward
We've grown over the years
Holding on to what we find
Before life disappears
love those lines
ur a beautifull poet..
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