Comments : MY FATHER

  • 12 years ago

    by Brix Ambray

    Thank you for reading this poem................

  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Wow! This is really really good! It is really kind and a good point of what all dads should be like.

  • 12 years ago

    by Love Panda

    The words you have used are very meaningful to the attempted style but for me they arnt glued together enough, it doesnt flow well. The structure is kind of there but it could be better. Instead of having so many short lines i think it would be benificial for you to have two short lines together as one long..then a middle stanza of little lines. Id like to have read some rhymes too.

    Not a bad effort though, i liked reading it alot regardless.