Comments : New Born Happiness

  • 9 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    And dries the tears of rains gone by.

    - I think you should just have the word "rains" as rain, because rain is a plural word anyway so it would still make sense.

    This is a beautiful little poem, filled with an upbeat tone and I adore the idea of falling asleep, into a dreamless sleep, and then waking up to something that seems to be another dream.

    I also like your layout of this poem, and how you really narrow the lines when you start listing each individual word. This really works well.

    This poem represents new life, and how it can create instant happiness, and innocence and how it offers so many new starts and fresh memories and opportunities.

    Great little write, and well done for doing the challenge suggested!!

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    Beauty can come in all sizes and forms. And it really is in the eye of the beholder. I agree with saffie here, this is a great poem and you did well with the happy challenge. It seems like you went for more imagery and I will definitely give you props for that! It seems like you are talking about a new baby new. And that would make sense or honestly it could be a new pet as well. Either way you did an excellent job in describing the little one. Also I love the ending, it seems like you were not happy before this and it changed your life, I love how it seems one thing can change anyone's life! Well done!

  • 9 years ago

    by gumshuda

    Well.. Firstly thank you for writing for my prompt.
    Writing happy poems is sometimes difficult for some writers but you have written the poem beautifully.

    From the very first line you have caught the reader in your emotion of happiness..... The sunlight streams which are an indicator of hope and joy which dry the tears of rain.

    Wonderful poem. 5/5