Submission date : 2008-09-26
Last edit : 2008-10-10
Breaking Dawn ( F P C D )
"ItÃ¢ï¿½ï¿½s that time of year again,
with ornaments that glow,
while snowflakes, snowmen, and a blanket of white,
cover up the ground below."
In the first line just get rid of that a?? thingy, it does that...
"standing out on my balcony,
watching this merry sight,
a shooting star falls through the sky,
as I wish for things to be alright."
Beautiful, you described this perfectly, it makes me want to me there...
"I donÃ¢ï¿½ï¿½t need any stockings filled,
with candy in bright colors red and blue,
I donÃ¢ï¿½ï¿½t need toys or any such things,
Because all I want for Christmas, is you."
Again, just get rid of that a?? thing.
Your ending was perfect, and this whole poem was so sweet and heartfelt. Nice job, 5/5 from me. Keep writing, always and forever....