Submission date : 2008-10-03
Breaking Dawn ( F P C D )
"One year older,
Happy birthday to me,
Do I look any different?
What do you see?"
I love how you tag on the questions at the end. Everytime I begin to read one of your poems, I always am drawn in completely by your word choice and how captivating it is, nice job! :)
"Do I seem somewhat wiser?
Has there been a big change?
Am I found more alluring?
Or truly more strange."
I think we really do ask ourselves this in our mind, and you captured that flawlessly.
Good job, take care, 5/5 from me. Keep writing, always and forever...
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Nema ( F C D )
I love this piece!
I never stumble on special-event poems, but this one I have to say was a bit capturing.
People write about their lonely birthdays, or their surprising birthdays, but this one was different.
Well written and I think I don't have to pick my fave stanza =)
write on xx