Formed poetry challenge #9

Afternoon all

Thanks to those still playing. The next challenge is fairly simple and is a form created by Hellon.

The loop poem.

The object is to write a poem where the final word of each line begins the next. Just to complete the loop I would like the very first word and very last word to be the same.

Post them here or to your account or both.

My example
(I had to write this as didn’t have one I could use)

The darkness

Darkness creeps like toxic smoke
Smoke filled dreams keeping me awake
Awake to the daydreams that never sleep
Sleep merely an ambition, just out of reach.

Reach for the stars we're told when
young
Young minds an explosion of dreams
Dreams meld with nightmares with age
Age arrives unnoticed with darkness.

Darren...I'm not sure why you didn't supply the link to let members know that there are a few variations to choose from...

http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/looppoetry.html

Thanks Hellon,

It's not a new poem but I wrote one a while back. Might help give some ideas

One Last Time
by Tony Apr 4, 2018

I smell your perfume on my skin
Skin burning like the guilt within
Within me my soul bears the cost
Cost of the love we had and lost

Lost a decade of my life
Life wasted when you became my wife
Wife... maybe that would be a stretch
Stretch the truth, there's always a catch

Catch me slipping one more time
Time and again I toe the line
Line drawn between love and hate
Hate that I have to feel this way

Way... found back into your bed
Bed of thorns, been stabbed and bled
Bled dry of will, this is the last
Last time, until the next time has passed

Passed up the chance to end the strife
Strife filled love made another life
Life in you, and soon you're due
Due Eighteen more years, me tethered to you

this is great Tony,

to keep within my own little rule for this challenge you would just need to alter the final line to;

'Due Eighteen more years, you tethered to I'

that way the very first and very last words are the same.

thanks for posting.

Wasn't for the challenge, I posted it a month ago. I figured it would be a good example.

Taken from my examples but...changed to suit your challenge Darren (at least I hope) :)

Bloody eyes

Bloody eyes..watching..waiting
waiting in gloomy shadows
shadows of night
night so...still
still they watch, still they wait
wait for you
you..the next victim
victim of evil
evil that lurks
lurks in silence
silence then...screams
screams...then silence
silence of night
night of shadows
shadows of gloom..waiting
waiting...watching
watching...eyes bloody.

Thanks Tony, it is a great example. It is harder than it looks to write a loop poem that isn’t choppy.

This is fantastic Hellon, cleverly written with some palindrome thrown in.

Love it.

Hi guys there won’t be a challenge 10.
I’m mindful of the fact by continuing this I am hogging any current challenges.

Thanks to all that contributed
Apart from the Rondeau and Sonnet I have enjoyed taking part.

If anybody wants to start a new challenge thread the floor is yours.

"You can lead a horse to water but you can't make it drink"

Thanks for trying to carry on with this challenge Darren. I have also enjoyed it apart from the Diamante which took 'challenge' to another level for me personally :)