Wake Up (Time to VOTE)

  • Maple Tree
    5 years ago

    Hello everyone, This was a quickie challenge just to get the poetic juices flowing and what beauty I have collected, just stunning Senryu's and Haiku's

    Please send me your vote , you may choose only ONE that you feel stands out about the rest, I will grant 10 points... we have a today and tomorrow to vote, please send me your votes via private message. I will post the winners on Monday

    Have fun everyone -

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    #1

    Wake up dead man (senryu)

    Rainbow chasing joy
    Flying, falling, slow running
    Alarm resurrects

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    #2
    Smokey Mountains Spring

    Rays burst between peaks
    Melting snowcapped mountain tops
    Mother bear peers out

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    #3
    Wake Up (Senryu)

    through my grazing mind
    unicorns suddenly jolt
    at my barking dogs

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    #4
    Don’t Get Up

    Rustling outside
    BEARS ARE RUMMAGING THE CAMP
    back in sleeping bag

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    #5
    Steps Away

    Dew drips on flower
    makes it droop and spring back up
    trail becomes lightened

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    #6

    I've been dead for years
    then she leaned against my back -
    now my branches bend.

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    #7
    Waking Up

    Good morning sunshine,
    busy bees and humming birds,
    spread your hope and joy.

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    #8
    Bad Dream

    I open my eyes
    For a moment I question
    Is this a nightmare?

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    #9
    The bird which lives on a maple tree... Haiku

    For the little bird,
    spring couldn't harvest any sap
    of a maple tree.

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    #10
    The wrong fairytale?

    Leaning over to
    kiss his sleeping beauty's lips
    He became wolf's tea

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    #11
    Coma

    Consciousness returned
    to my sons eyes as my prayers
    were answered today

  • Larry Chamberlin
    5 years ago

    Terrific!

  • Darren
    5 years ago

    these are all very well written

  • silvershoes
    5 years ago, updated 5 years ago

    #4 made me laugh as the experience is familiar. I’ve had quite a few bear interactions while camping ;). I think I would consider “rustling” 2 syllables, though it could easily be 3.

    #9 I believe has an extra syllable in line two?

  • Maple Tree
    5 years ago, updated 5 years ago

    Keep the votes coming in folks... whoooot, I will post 1st,2nd,and 3rd place

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