Weekly Contest Results August 6th

  • Meena Krish
    5 years ago, updated 5 years ago

    Good Morning Everyone!
    The judges had a tough time with so many varied talents. Nonetheless, they
    made their choices. The front page winners are Mark with his poem
    “Those Jasmine eyes”, “here is a leaf” by Charlie and Larry’s
    “The Golden Road Home (50th class reunion).

    Congrats Winners and Congrats to all those who received a HM.

    WINNERS:

    Those Jasmine Eyes by Mark

    The Golden Road Home by Larry Chamberlin

    here is a leaf by Charlie

    COMMENTS:

    Those Jasmine eyes by Mark (10 points)

    I have read this over and over, I still do not follow, not sure what it means.
    To me this is good. If I was studying English Literature and this was a poem
    brought up in class, we could pick the bones out of it for the whole semester.
    This poem is that good. It is one of those you need to read aloud, but try not to
    do it in that deep 'The Raven' commentary if you can. You feel the pace
    quicken the voice deepen as you read. Then the last 2 lines leave a pause in your
    own little reality, as you ponder. This poem is THAT brilliant. I wish I could
    give out 20 points.
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    Those Jasmine Eyes by Mark (10 points)

    This poem took my breath away!

    The elegant, old English flare and style are truly
    magical in this poem. To yearn for a person's love-
    just beautiful.
    Its difficult to write this style and Mark captivated the readers
    this week. Marvelous write!
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    here is a leaf by Charlie (7 points)

    Well now, here’s something different. I thoroughly enjoyed everything
    about this nature poem, from the title, to the structure, to the word choices.
    Simple, yet unlike anything I’ve read up until now. It’s always refreshing to
    come across a poem that is completely free from cliches, clutter, or
    recycled vocabulary. Good write, Charlie

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    here is a leaf by Charlie (10 points)

    I find this interesting and very imaginative. A simple nature poem
    about a leaf described with simple language and just reading it, it
    does make the reader wonder more about it...enjoyed this write.

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    The Golden Road Home (50th class reunion) by Larry Chamberlin (4 points)

    There’s something sweet and tender about Larry’s poem. I imagine a video
    slideshow of a group of young people aging throughout the years - growing
    apart, occasionally coming together, and the many moments in between of each
    person’s long, meaningful life. Laughter, tears, achievement, love, loss, all of it.
    High school reunions have a way of making us reflect on the big picture and all
    of the tiny little moments that comprise it. Thoughtful nostalgia and appreciation
    for having led a full life guide this poem from start to finish, and I thoroughly
    enjoyed the journey.
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    The Golden Road Home by Larry Chamberlain (7 points)

    It is difficult to judge this contest when a super mod writes such a
    great poem. I have read this 3 times and I have read all 31 poems
    nominated this week twice. I have to be sure that this is my second
    favorite poem this week and it is. There is always that nagging doubt that
    because he is a mod I like his poem and I am sure the mods think this as well.
    But I can be sure that I have picked this for the right reasons. Larry's poem
    takes us back in time season by season and not only gives us a snapshot of his
    journey but gives us all a subtle reminder that time skips by whether we choose
    to make the most of every day or whether we standstill and watch it race by. A
    poem extremely well crafted and I am thankful it was shared.

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    The Golden Road Home (50th class reunion) by Larry Chamberlin (7 points)

    The feeling of the passage of fifty years and the joy of reunion with
    those old times has been beautifully captured by the poet and offers
    itself as the pleasant breeze from a fresh morning to the reader. So
    wonderfully have the feelings been braided in this poem about, both, the
    beautiful happy times, and the sad chilly times, leaving the poet satisfied
    and content on reminiscing all the beautiful times of his life, that I am
    left hoping for the same.

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    HMs:

    There is a Reason for This by Maple Tree

    To my unborn baby Brooklyn

    Dancing in a Noose by End of Eternity

    Cyclones and Concupiscence

    Is this it? by silvershoes

    Anxiety (acrostic) by Mr Darcy

    COMMENTS:

    There is a Reason for This by Maple Tree (10 points)

    This poem has so much fear, pain, but also strength in it. Having a
    sick loved one and believing in the inevitability of losing them - it is
    agonizing and heartbreaking imagining what Andrea is going through
    with her daughter. That feeling of powerlessness, in my opinion, is hell on
    earth. Its torment to watch as someone you love is fading before your eyes.
    Though you offer unconditional love and support with outstretched arms,
    it somehow isn’t enough and it should be. Love should be enough. Especially
    a love that I know runs deep, unreserved, and selfless. There is one way in
    which Robyn is beyond lucky in this lifetime, and it is in having a mom like
    Andrea on her team. Beautiful poem that made my heart ache and made me weep.
    I’m so sorry for what you’re going through, Andrea.

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    There is a Reason for This by Maple Tree (4 points)

    Andrea writes about the true feelings felt by a person when they are
    in distress and hear repeated statements that causes nothing more than
    frustration and anger; and there is nothing more remarkable about poetry
    than the fact that it speaks true words which, sometimes, people fail to
    realize. Words are not what are needed, the only thing needed in hard
    times is magic.

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    To my unborn baby Brooklyn (4 points)
    A heart warming write from a to be a mother to her unborn
    child. A sentiment shared by all mothers about their child. A heart warming
    read which put a smile on my face...sweetly penned!

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    To my unborn baby Brooklyn (4 points)

    Loved the footnote to this, nothing changes perspective more than a child of
    your own, just wait till you hold her in your arms and look into her eyes. You
    will become her protector, she will be royalty in your arms and nothing trivial
    will matter anymore. What a debut write this is, and to give it a form as well.
    So much love and pride in this piece and I am honoured to give it an HM at
    least.
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    Dancing In A Noose by End Of Eternity (4 points)

    I love this poem, with its unique
    twist of "Pray and Prey" at the end.

    To love someone and to be betrayed its devastating
    to the heart! and to the soul... brilliant poem this week by
    End of Eternity!!

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    Cyclones and Concupiscence by Aegis (7 points)

    Metaphoric brilliance this week by Aegis!

    This writer amazes me with his creative design and flare
    with words and visual display.
    Loved every line!

    "And like a rip current she stole a kiss and
    drifted into the sunrise during high tide;"

    ^^^^^ beautiful

    A new twist to the Ocean metaphor. Just beautiful!!!
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    Is this it? by silvershoes (7 points)

    A poem which takes the reader into many paths of thoughts about life
    and about our very existence in this world. In just a few lines it takes
    me deep into the depths about life and the why’s...excellent!

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    Anxiety (acrostic) by Mr. Darcy (10 points)

    Mr. Darcy has perfectly described the feelings of anxiety and the
    consequent turmoil that takes place within a person in this beautiful
    acrostic form. Although the imagery ended up sending me fretting and
    twisting too (quite funnily) you have beautifully written this wonderful
    piece of poetry. Congratulations.

  • Mr. Darcy
    5 years ago

    Well done winners and fellow HM's. Thankyou to all who helped to make this week's contest possible.

  • Larry Chamberlin
    5 years ago, updated 5 years ago

    Thanks to the three judges with comments on my poem (and of course for the win). To the one judge, I understand, it seems tricky but really, I hope every judge ignores who the author is each time.

    Congrats to Mark and Charlie. The guys seem to be catching up! Congrats also to the HMs.

    Thanks to all the judges and thanks to Meena for posting.

  • CJ Maleney
    5 years ago

    Well done one and all fantastic as always.

    Respect to mods and judges

    Craig

  • Aegis
    5 years ago

    Thanks everyone for the love and support! :)

  • Mark
    5 years ago, updated 5 years ago

    Thank you judges for such encouraging comments. Thanks Nam's and Scott for nominating

  • Poet on the Piano
    5 years ago

    Wonderful work! Congrats to everybody and thank you to our judges, as well as Meena for hosting.

  • Ya----Na
    5 years ago

    Congrts everyone.
    Thanks everyone for contributing so well.
    Love for pnq family

    S

  • End Of Eternity
    5 years ago

    Trying my best to gather courage...to be active again...to post again & I get an HM....what more could one ask for :))

    Thank you so much friends :)

    Congratulations to each and every one of you :)

    Keep expressing...

  • Larry Chamberlin replied to End Of Eternity
    5 years ago

    Nitin, you certainly deserve it. Glad to see you writing again. These poems are fabulous.

    Also, meant to thank Scott Cole for nominating but forgot. Senior moment ;8-)

  • End Of Eternity replied to Larry Chamberlin
    5 years ago

    Thank You :)

    Still get goose bumps with every acknowledgement.... :))

  • naaz
    5 years ago

    Love, love, love...

    for winners, judges, moderators, each and everyone.

  • Maple Tree
    5 years ago

    Congratulations everyone :-)

    thank you judges, hugs you

  • silvershoes
    5 years ago

    Thank you so much for the honorable mention! Congratulations all. Thanks, judges.