Comments : UnSkull

  • 8 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    Oh my Gorden lol, Jorden seriously, God this was absolutely breathtaking, i was waiting for a 201 poeem and here I got a master piece!

    This aint only dark, but clear at the same time, I could smell stuff while reading your poem, and see images, not pleasant ones tho lol, this was just worded in a very flowing way, and the internal rhyme was magnificent, i hope you are aware of your talent.

    never are eyes shy to show
    how sly they are
    even though
    their caves run deep.

    ^
    i mean woaw what an imagination!
    how descriptive, its just very unique.

    and what's
    more -
    they are beginning to grow larger
    than ever before.

    ^
    verrrrrryyyyyyyyyyyyyyy impressive!

    Where are those pills, again?
    ^
    lol like seriously ? ya seriously I am nominating this on tuesday If i was still in town, if not I will ask larry to do so from our club account, yep it will be my "will of death or testament" watever you call it.

    and trust me not all writers here give readers the feeling of writing a gd comment or even Writing a comment.

    well done...

  • 8 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    And i did not forget, nominated, better wins!

  • 8 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    Jordan, dear...:)

    You did an awesome job...your imagination is just really wild and interesting! I feel like reading this poem over and over again....you have this magical talent..:)

    five..

  • 8 years ago

    by Jordan

    Just so that everyone knows, this poem is inspired by migraines as well as the phenomena known as formication and phantosmia. I have never experienced the latter two, but I take great interest in such psychological problems.

  • 8 years ago

    by Kips

    Lovely and witty. Well fashioned words with pictures well painted. Good poem!