Very vivid and descriptive. Perhaps one of the most captivating poems for this week, put alone the theme itself, the write successfully reflected nature in a very charming way and implemented such role in her usage of words like
"Sweet jasmine breathes a perfumed sigh"
"yawning sky" "wise owl"
A very refreshing piece of art.
The rhyme and flow just added bonus beauty to the poem, for the wording itself having no rhyme at all would just have been as beautiful. A very well penned poem.
The plight of these poor souls has been captured
so well. I see their situation captured in the papers
and news coverage but the writer's words here not
only gives a painful image but the inner screams
and their empty looks which are so lost. I also like
how each stanza is separated with a one line
sentence and then it takes the reader deeper into
its meaning. This one stood out for me:
Death's choke hold.
Can you hold a thing against me?
My feet break no barriers but
you may call me
Miss Continental Shift.
No teeth behind my lips.
^^What a sight filled with pain, sadness no
sorrow...it moved me.
The ending just leaves me as a reader with the
sounds of thunder, the cries of children and their
helpless parents...touching write.
4 years ago
by Ben Pickard
Well done on the win - excellent piece.
All the very best