Comments : Refugee

  • 4 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    I will comment this evening after work... But I have to nominate.... Love this!

  • 4 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Well done on the win - excellent piece.
    All the very best
    Ben

  • 4 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    JUDGING COMMENT:

    The plight of these poor souls has been captured
    so well. I see their situation captured in the papers
    and news coverage but the writer's words here not
    only gives a painful image but the inner screams
    and their empty looks which are so lost. I also like
    how each stanza is separated with a one line
    sentence and then it takes the reader deeper into
    its meaning. This one stood out for me:

    Death's choke hold.

    pessimist amiss,
    Can you hold a thing against me?
    My feet break no barriers but
    you may call me
    Miss Continental Shift.
    No teeth behind my lips.

    ^^What a sight filled with pain, sadness no
    sorrow...it moved me.

    The ending just leaves me as a reader with the
    sounds of thunder, the cries of children and their
    helpless parents...touching write.

  • 4 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    Very vivid and descriptive. Perhaps one of the most captivating poems for this week, put alone the theme itself, the write successfully reflected nature in a very charming way and implemented such role in her usage of words like

    "Sweet jasmine breathes a perfumed sigh"
    "yawning sky" "wise owl"

    A very refreshing piece of art.

    The rhyme and flow just added bonus beauty to the poem, for the wording itself having no rhyme at all would just have been as beautiful. A very well penned poem.

    And I have to say, this is utterly romantic.