Superb piece of rhyming poetry. Well done on this.

All the best,

Ben

This composition is just 'wow'! The way it is written is so beautiful :)
Keep writing :)

So poetical CC. A mirror to who you are. Lovely!

Enjoyed reading this beautiful piece of yours. All the best.

Thankyou. I always appreciate the comments. We're all on it together ;-)

Catherine x

Cath, this is breathtaking! Adding this to my faves.

Lovely message so poetically expressed. Your rhyming here is just great.

*Nominated

So glad to see this nominated it'd very relateable to many of us here

Glad to see this nominated. A breathtaking piece with great rhyming and depth that will appeal to anyone who gas traversed a similar path. Loved it Milly x

Fairytales and love stories have a lot to answer for with regards to our expectations of love. This is beautifully crafted Catherine :-) x
=^.^=

I keep reading this piece over and over.... the flow is so amazing .. the way it feels like a I can see the journey through the stanzas... well deserved nomination

Congrats on the win, Cath!

Aww! Thankyou all, for my win :-) I'm touched :-)

Warm regards,
Catherine x

Congrats on your win

Congratulations!

This was beautiful and captivating.
Congrats on the win

K. M.

You asked for critique,

As far as structure goes yours is spot on here. I've seen many people who try to write rhyming stanzas and they will have lines that are too wordy, or have too many syllables which can break the flow of a piece. The same can happen with too few. I would change the 6th stanza to,

"I tried so hard to be her,
I tried being who I am.
Yet still I find myself alone,
And lonely as I stand.

I feel it flows better than splitting the second sentence between two lines.

Your skill at rhyme needs no analysis, I do however challenge you to try your hand at consonence. For example, "while I've grow old and weary knowing." Changing one word gives this line a recurring "w" sound that is pleasing to the ear and adds to the flow of the piece. You can also substitute the "old" with "wise" and achieve the same effect.

To the message? It is beautiful and you could not have done better. You are a talented storyteller yourself, and my only request is to try your hand at dialogue. No one tells a story better than the characters who are in it.

Congrats on the win.