Quite an unusual write for you Ben, instead of "The Lion, the Witch and the Wardrobe" You made ; The dirty old man, the Telescope eye, searching for things to grope! Glad the ending brought back the lessons learned by Life's reality, the contrast between good and evil, they repel each other. Glad it was nominated.
Many people, myself included, would be shocked at reading this. Not at the content so much, as the guy who wrote such a piece. If you don’t mind me saying, it resembles the kind of humour that would choose to write about. Not that it is like my poems. You have a style of your own and this poem oozes that sae quality that you use in your more formed poetry.
I literally laughed out loud with this. I read it out loud to Claire, trying to add a suitable uppercass, Jeeves and Wooster type voice to the ‘Lookey here, Lookey here’ lol
As for the punchline, I never saw that coming (no pun, really!)
This type of poem, a poem with a moral could be illustrated. I could see it now, even a short animation. Maybe, Pixar will take this on? You could be rich, you hear, RICH!