Comments : Morals Magnified (dirty old man)

  • 1 year ago

    by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

    Wow, Ben, this is superb, creative, and beautiful! I love the flow, the rhymes, and the fun it gave me while reading this. I love the moral story in this piece. Well written! Added to favorites!

    --- MKKK

  • 1 year ago

    by Jamie

    Love this Ben. Loved the ending especially. Will nominate when i can.

  • 1 year ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Hahaha, oh too funny Ben. What an interesting topic, brilliantly rhymed - love it! :-) x
    =^.^=

    **I think you meant 'aloud' not 'allowed'?

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      I certainly did, Kitty. Those blasted homophones...

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    I am gobsmacked, but in a good way lol

    Great punch line :)

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks, Michael. I thought it was time I tried to write something humorous...

  • 1 year ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    You put a smile on my face Ben. All the very best

  • 1 year ago

    by CRAFTY KEN

    Quite an unusual write for you Ben, instead of "The Lion, the Witch and the Wardrobe" You made ; The dirty old man, the Telescope eye, searching for things to grope! Glad the ending brought back the lessons learned by Life's reality, the contrast between good and evil, they repel each other. Glad it was nominated.

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks, Ken. Yes, I like to think there's a moral in there somewhere.

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Clever Ben, very clever. The moral of your story was what was peering back at you on your last glimpse. Too funny!

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Many people, myself included, would be shocked at reading this. Not at the content so much, as the guy who wrote such a piece. If you don’t mind me saying, it resembles the kind of humour that would choose to write about. Not that it is like my poems. You have a style of your own and this poem oozes that sae quality that you use in your more formed poetry.

    I literally laughed out loud with this. I read it out loud to Claire, trying to add a suitable uppercass, Jeeves and Wooster type voice to the ‘Lookey here, Lookey here’ lol

    As for the punchline, I never saw that coming (no pun, really!)

    This type of poem, a poem with a moral could be illustrated. I could see it now, even a short animation. Maybe, Pixar will take this on? You could be rich, you hear, RICH!

    Suffice to say, I really enjoyed this.

    Take care.

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Michael, your comment made me laugh more than my poem made you laugh.

  • 1 year ago

    by Hellon

    Are you related to Benny Hill in any way? Surely you must be with this very clever piece??? :)

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      No, but he was a funny man, wasn't he?
      Thanks, Hellon

  • 1 year ago

    by VAHID

    great ending! :D