This piece is so very welcome on a day that is cold, raining and miserable and particularly for those who spend too much time stuck within four walls or who live too far away from nature. Your love of nature shines through this delightful piece and I can imagine you strolling through the fields, resting by waterfalls and finally climbing the highest mountain to sit and stare at the night sky. What an idyllic life that would be to have such freedom.
You have captured the essence of the beauty of nature in each of the stanzas and even managed to colorfully include imagery of changing seasons. My favorite lines of all are "I am the beach, I am the sea and all of her is all of me" for I have a particular fondness for all things sea and beach having spent most of my childhood near beaches. For me this poem brings all the imagery of nature that I love and miss directly into my room. Milly x
Milly - thank you and I am so sorry for your inability to enjoy nature quite the way you would like these days.
2 years ago
The imagery is extremely vivid throughout this piece ben, and I must say wow because I could picture each stanza well in my mind. And I did not even notice the rhyming until the second read through so that tells me as usual the rhyming flows well and doesn't feel like it is forced into the poem at all.
There doesn't really need to be much said about this piece that you have not written. But the hidden meaning is deep and wonderful in my opinion. You seem to have mature as all things this world has to offer, but I did notice that humans were not involved and thinking about this more, you wrote about all things you find beautiful about nature and things that bring you peace and joy, and it seems like humans are the opposite of that thinking, so I love how you made my mind think that way. Also you speak of nature in such a way that you feel like you two are one entity and you are intertwined with her, and perhaps it is a statement that you have fallen back in love with nature again and being so- she has with you too. Excellent vivid poem from you.
I so love poems about appreciation of nature. It is simple and calming. Can always lighten up my mood. And this piece is a great example. I feel the sincerity of your appreciation to nature’s beauty from every imagery and it’s well formed rhyming. Thank you for sharing this piece. It inspires me to do my best in writing even more. Favorited!
Ben, what a magical ride through our beautiful habitat. Love the flow and rhyme, great lines like; And sunlight through a raindrop brings
Such wealth of hue which paints the clouds:
A rainbow borne on angels' wings
Which lights the black and lifts the crowds. Deserves a Nomination, but I'm fresh out.
Thank you, Kitty. I thought it about time I wrote something a little more lighthearted!
2 years ago
by Em (marmite)
Wow Ben this is an extremely deep piece Ben which I feel has more meaning to it but right now I cannot our my finger on it but I will once I've read over it again. Astounding , beautiful work as always
Take care x
This poem is the benchmark that all us amateur poets should strive to reach.
I am actually amazed at the professionalism of this piece. I moan that I can’t think of anything worthy of writing, yet you have reminded me that there is an abundance of writing prompts all around us. I honestly must walk around with my eyes shut.
As I read this I felt I was walking with you, notebook in hand jotting down the wonderment as I saw them. Your way of describing a rainbow was different class.
I would love nothing more than seeing this in a poetry book of yours being studied at high school. Imagine the bones they could pick out of this one.
Such a brilliant write, I genuinely believe everything I have just said (not just blowing smoke up your a-hole)
Added to that little exclusive club of mine, my favourites.
I meant to comment when I read this earlier, but this poem simply made me happy and gave me such peace. A sense of serenity. Also, this flowed SO well! It's fun reading your poems aloud as there's always a sort of music to them and this poem just leaves the reader feeling whole and connected. How often we forget how nature can be just what our souls need in times when we are too stressed to appreciate what surrounds us.