As always a feast of emotion and colour metaphors that grasps the mind and the heart.
For me that final line is so profound. "But stars that cannot shine are starry waste"
I think it has a much deeper meaning equally "A life that cannot be lived is a waste" Milly x
Absolutely loved this Ben... Those last 2 lines are amazing and say to me that you can't always be everyone's cup of tea but someone will love you anyways though maybe I read something more into it glad to see it nominated. Take care x
This took me a few reads to conjure up a formidable comment to write. You always do well with metaphors and working them into a poem, and here it is no different.
Admittedly I had to look up the word iridescence, but after learning its meaning you did well to use it here. It seems like you made the first few lines center around it, which is unique in itself. The start of the poem I believe has a person who has changed from this happy go lucky person into someone who struggles every day, judging from the title- it is addiction. And I know the poem goes deeper than that, but it's the basic premise. You have described perfectly the face of addiction, I enjoyed how you tried to give addiction a physical form, albeit a monster shape, kind of like a shapeshifter-
which to be fair it kind of is, it changes your emotional state and physical appearance too. I liked the story you told altogether, because as you see it addiction is a nighttime thing, so possibly alcohol because you show us that the character is traveling through the night without any knowledge of where they are going or doing, and it goes to show how bad addiction really is.
I do believe the star part is why they turned to addiction in the first place or that's how I see it- Perhaps their star has stopped shining because they feel guilty about something, and they blame themselves, and the stars could be a metaphor for heaven. I'm just spitballing here though. Either way great poem
This sonnet speaks a lot about a hurful truth, Ben...you did an amazing job making very important points thru a very lovely sonnet...and here I go jealous again of how amazing you are as a sonnet writer (actually king :-) )