Comments : Grandfather's Broken Sphere

  • 11 months ago

    by Maple Tree

    My heart.... be still my heart
    hugs you Ben <3

    • 11 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Andrea. He was very old and in a terrible way, it was probably for the best. He has suffered a couple of strokes in the last few weeks and he really wasn't up for the fight anymore, especially without my Grandmother who died this time last year.

      Take care

  • 11 months ago

    by Jamie

    May he rest in eternal peace. A lovely dedication to your grandfather ben.

  • 11 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    My deepest sympathy, Ben...now grandpa is with grandma...may they rest in peace. This is a lovely dedication...and I can relate too well because my grandpa has also been very weak since grandma passed away. He's alive but his eyes are lonely and once in a while he tells us of his regrets.

    • 11 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      I hear the same story too often, Mel. Thank you and take care

  • 11 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    When two lives live together for so long they become part of a one and when the one is broken it is hard for the other to carry on.

    No matter how much love they still have around them they never really get over the loss of each other. Now at last he is free of pain sitting with the love of his life looking down fondly at the family that they created.

    I feel sure they are both reading this poem and feeling so much love and pride in you their very talented, genuinely lovely grandson. Much love Milly x

    • 11 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Milly, this brought me to tears.

  • 11 months ago

    by Brenda

    Ben, I am so sorry for your loss. Such a sadly beautiful write- hugs-

  • 11 months ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    This is such a pure write and dedication to your grandfather. I'm so sorry for your loss but you have written of such a profound soul who needed his love in order to see life's lush beauty. Who couldn't bear to be without. You really wrote of the passion, meaning and purpose they gave each other. Especially when referencing the sphere.

    Love is eternal and may they both rest in peace, comforted by each other.

    • 11 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks so much for your kind words and time, MA

  • 11 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hi, Ben.

    I am so sorry for not commenting earlier. It's clear how important this man was to you and your family. He is, again, with your grandmother.

    Sorry for your loss.

    Take care.

  • 11 months ago

    by CRAFTY KEN

    Ben, I may have offered my condolences previously as I was remined when I clicked on the "Like". Reading it again brought renewed thought of your grief, heartbreaking was when you said that Grandpa couldn't live without her.
    A sphere has no start nor has it any end,
    but cut in half, its mercurial beauty is no more.
    Split thus, the two halves will warp and bend -
    the mystery destroyed by the untamed core.
    These lines remind us of infinity, as you said, they have no beginning or end, I think God through the trillions of circles is revealing himself. The Book of Job declares that God sits on the circle of the earth, its not flat!

    • 11 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you for your words, Ken.

  • 11 months ago

    by elyart

    "and birds that sang had sung and sored and flew"

    You possess a powerful mind.

    • 11 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks for your comments, elyart

  • 11 months ago

    by Guilty By Design

    That last stanza is absolutely beautiful. I’m quite sorry for your loss. My world shattered when I lost my grandmother. I can only imagine the pain of losing two so closely.

  • 9 months ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Judge's Comment:

    Perfect word choices and haunting sentiments make up yet another masterpiece from Ben, as this time he delves into a raw and brutally honest piece about his grandfather’s struggle in living without his other half. Starting off with the truth, Ben weaves the facts of his grandfather’s passing along with his understanding of why he passed: his wife had gone but a week before him. The tribute to the relationship his grandfather and grandmother had, a circle unadulterated, with the last verse constructed so that the reader understands that, in his grandfather’s eyes, there was no living without his other half. Such absence makes the heart grow weak. As hard as that surely is for Ben, it is comforting to know that the circle is complete as they are surely together once more.

    -Stephen

    • 9 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you so much, Stephen, for this and your other comments and your overall time as judge.