Comments : She Sought Shade

  • 5 months ago

    by Star

    I find it difficult to write long pietry that flows this beautifully. The poem also has rhythm and a simple rhyme. This is great!!

    • 5 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Michael, Star, Zia - thanks for reading and commenting.

  • 5 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    My tongue and lips are now undone,
    Your words flowing like rivers run.

  • 5 months ago

    by Zia Mikaela

    This is my favorite! the tongue just glides so smoothly with every verse! I wish i could be as talented as you! you are an amazing writer :)

  • 5 months ago

    by CJ Maleney

    How could I not like this dude.

    To me it carries a very very poignant message

    Respect as always

    Craig

    • 5 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks, Craig. Yep, we're definitely loosing something, aren't we?

  • 5 months ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Loved the tongue twister of a title and not only the imagery of this poem, but how it flows and truly paints that atmosphere - of sorrow, of whatever realms unknown, etc.

    Beautifully written!

  • 5 months ago

    by Michael

    Ben,
    Absolutely loving rhyming tale fella:)
    M

    • 5 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks, Michael. Glad you enjoyed.

  • 5 months ago

    by Meena Krish

    I like the magical pixie picture and the blend of nature
    and human feelings which got me reading till the end...a lovely
    yet sad read.

  • 5 months ago

    by Brenda

    Ben, this is so sad and pretty all at the same time. I do adore woodland creatures and all mythical beasties. Nicely rhymed and flows beautifully.

  • 5 months ago

    by Daniel

    Loved the title, and whilst the image you paint is definitely nothing new, the story carries enough depth, and your word choice is interesting and fitting. I feel you wrote yourself into this poem, as it gets stronger with each stanza. A sad and (unfortunately) too true poem.

    • 5 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks, Daniel. You're right in terms of it being nothing new, but I suppose it's a topic that becomes more relevant with the passing of time and the continued destruction we cause.
      Take care

  • 5 months ago

    by CRAFTY KEN

    Well done Ben, I agree with the others, that your rhyming metaphors were expertly placed. Indeed, a sad tale, the industrial acid smog and rain, which is destroying many a beloved woodland, even the mighty whale has become frail.
    Added to my favorites.

    • 5 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Very true, Ken. Thanks for reading.

  • 3 months ago

    by Vanesa

    A sad read but left me actually with a sweet taste.

  • 3 weeks ago

    by Star

    I was reminded of this while reading and hearing the news of the wildfires in the Amazon rainforest. Both carry a heavy and sad feeling..