Comments : We Try Such Silly Things (Lira)

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Very cool Ben...I have never heard of this style.

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks, Brenda. To be honest, neither had I but I was looking through Meena's work and saw she had written one so I thought I'd give it a go. I don't think it's great at all, but it's a start!

  • 1 year ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    ...and I thought I was the only one making poetry forms up!
    I like what you've created too, the balance of life that sadly fails.
    Well done and take care.

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      No, Michael, two can play at that game!
      Thanks and all the best, good man.

  • 1 year ago

    by Star

    I dont know what this form is, but it is so interesting I want to try it!!
    “a sad place between light and nowhere.”
    My favorite part is this, it sets my mind to dark places.
    I love this!

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      It was fun to try, but the uneven number syllable count isn't easy for a man who dreams in iambic pentameter!

  • 1 year ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Loved this as always you have a wonderful imagination that takes the reader into previously unimagined realms. Much love Milly x

  • 1 year ago

    by CRAFTY KEN

    Hey Ben, very Artistic, and, Masterful! As I read, these thoughts entered my head: I see the mysteries of God, the infinite gap between light, and, darkness, as written;
    There lies a sad place between light and nowhere, great line. Roses by design, this requires a "Designer!". Though flames don't, and flowers don't, between them care, yes, the whole Creation declares the Glory of God, but, care arrived in Him becoming one of us! Great piece, added to my favorites!

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Interesting thoughts, Ken. Many thanks and all the best.

  • Dude this was enchanting... the fact you used roses and candlelight made this so Spanish along with the form I have to admit I've seen them bit I believe I've never wrote one ... this just shows your artistic talent and imagination to think of things outside the box .. lovely piece

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Lovely comment, Tony. Thank you.

  • 1 year ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    You are full of surprises and you imagination has no limits. I love it. All the very best Ben