Is there a significance of 2nd of April? The imagery to me is of a couple of friends both dressed in warm snuggly red hoodies sitting on a porch bench that they have sat out on many times before. Just looking up at the April moon reminiscing of things gone by. The contagious laughter made me feel like they were very good friends who know each other very well. Milly x
I do love this and love this form, Jamie. However, I believe the penultimate line has ten syllables instead of the required nine. 'illuminated' being five by my count. Perhaps just 'to illuminated stars that look'?
I do think there's a few too many adjectives in this. It just felt like a mouthful to me with these lines. I know this is a formed poem (and you have to have certain syllables) but even a pause may have helped create a better flow. Your words than "through .... toward ... that look ... with" seemed a bit too heavy handed and not natural enough. Just my opinion though.
The idea of hoodies blanketing the both of you is so lovely though. Comforting. There's a sense of calm in the ending lines, the sound of laughter perhaps overpowering the wind, and the stars lighting a way in the darkness.