Comments : Broken Adagios

  • 1 week ago

    by Rania Moallem

    A beautiful poem, very beautiful wording, smooth rhyme, it is indeed slow and yet compelling poem. It reminded me of William Wordsworth.

    I started feeling involved in the poem reaching the 3rd line, it was powerful and simple. I loved the concept but think you do not need "but" since there is no contrasting with (I do not swim). Maybe you meant it in a different way but I'm only speaking from how interpreted it.

    The other parts are heartbreaking, however, definitely not the cliche way of writing an emotional poem, you actually have a wide imagination.

    The outcome is touching. I enjoyed reading every verse.

    • 1 week ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you so much, Rania. Great comment. All the best to you,

      Ben

  • 1 week ago

    by Scott Cole

    Nominated Ben

    • 1 week ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Much appreciated, Scott.
      Take care.

  • 1 week ago

    by Milly Hayward

    It always amazes me the beautiful tapestries that you paint with words..Drenched with emotion and imagery you make even the simplest things glorious. "The grass is mocked by weeds" and "The blackbird flings a listless tune" what a wonderfully creative way of viewing and portraying the world. Glad to see it nominated. Milly x

  • 1 week ago

    by Em (marmite)

    I liked it so much, I commented twice.

    • 1 week ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks, Em. Our poetry is different, but you portray a rawness that can only be present through experience. You can't buy that.

      Take care

  • 1 week ago

    by Em (marmite)

    No matter what mood you try and paint in your poetry Ben you do so with such elegance. I wish I had that skill..

  • 1 week ago

    by S.T.A.R.

    Line by line the poem gets deeper. It feels like you are slowly trying to make your way up a mountain, trying to reach the peak ( which is the love you seek) but instead of getting closer the night falls and it becomes dark (further away).

    I really am feeling so much sadness in your latest poems. You have magical way with words you convey emotions so well!!

  • 1 week ago

    by Walter

    A masterpiece of words...I really liked this Ben

    • 1 week ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Means a lot, Walter. It's always nice to write something people enjoy.

  • 1 week ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    The beauty of music sways throughout this lyrical piece. Just wonderful.