by Hellon
Now I will try to 'amputate' myself from the going's on of this past week or two to comment on this because I will never let any difference I have with the poet get in the way of acknowledging a good poem and yes, this is good! It's very raw throughout and keeps the reader on edge.. something that I feel a sonnet can never achieve. |
by Ben Pickard
Thank you, Hellon (just in case you came back to check whether I did anyway) :) |
by Daniel
This is quite different from what I’m used to seeing from you , Ben. You’re clearly as capable with freer verse as you are with the restrictions of sonnet writing. The word choice in this is very matter-of-fact, unflowery, bordering sometimes on spoken word, but I think this is very necessary! |
by Ben Pickard
Thanks so much, Daniel. Great comment. It's funny, because I actually write a fair bit of free verse - people just don't normally notice, lol. Not sure what that says about it but there we go. |
by Everlasting
quietly now, quietly.... |
by Ben Pickard
Lucero - I truly love your comments and poetry.'Unique' doesn't come close. |
by Brenda
Wow Ben, this is powerful! Your imagery was stunningly graphic. Well done Sir... |
by Ben Pickard
Thanks, Brenda |
by Dreamofolwin
I'm " blown away " by your poem Ben!! |
by Ben Pickard
I see what you did there, Olwin. |
by Maple Tree
you make my Jaw drop! |
by Ben Pickard
Thank you, Maple. Hope you're well. |
A Haunting, macabre tapestry that captures vividly the horrors of war. Not a huge fan of non rhyming or war poetry I find your imagery and emotion pulling content to be spot on and worryingly compelling because the visuals are scarily accurate. A great write. Milly x |
by Ben Pickard
I wasn't a huge fan of war poetry until I read Wilfred Owen's "Anthem for doomed youth" and "Dulce et decorum est". They are masterpieces and the imagery in the latter is haunting and so vivid. |
by Everlasting
I saw it coming. I saw it coming and I just couldn’t run away from it. Really, your poem was the bomb. It hit me. |
by Ben Pickard
Thanks so much again, Luce. |
by Darren
wow |
by Ben Pickard
Just as I was beginning to think of rewriting it in iambic pentameter... |
by Milo
You had my attention from start to finish. Your poems always have a way of catching my full attention. Congrats! |
by Ben Pickard
Thanks so much, Milo |