the title is a stroke of genius. good take on highwayman but the character is anything but of high moral. this is like one of the western movies with the cowboy hats and person walking into a bar and trying to settle their differences, this is really a movie in words. who would you have to play the character in real life?
Such a dark ending that honestly i didn't see coming at all. I absolutely love your writing when you seem to be more free. I personally think your best poems are when you write from either experience or put a personal touch within. This one seemed to have that honestly. It's a metaphor clearly but you put the reality in which you live now into it. The title captures the poem spot on. Although it's sort of a pun it works perfectly. You, as one of the people inside the poem itself is the one feeling low, and it seems by the end you gave up. So the sadness is consistent throughout which makes it a great read. And of course the rhyming is a nice touch because it flows well and doesn't interrupt anything. I see no glaring errors. Well done
Once again I read this few days ago, but it was not the right to leave a comment.
Rather than saying this is another great write by you I waited, till the poem sank in. And I understood why it may have been in the miscellaneous category, with that dark ending.
This isn’t just a poem it’s more of a though a bad one, or perhaps a fear. Sometimes in a frightening moment where life look so beautiful, the thought comes across with a knife. What if? What if this life I am blessed with, shatters between my hands. What if and what if!
Now this became real to me, and I could relate to it. Those thoughts and what ifs may be the reason of us going downhill.
This is a terrifying poem!!
(Just joking :)
I may be way off, and if I am I’m sorry about that.