Comments : (Low)wayman

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Brenda

    Ben, amazeballs! I was captivated the entire write. I really love your writing! I can actually see you getting shady lol!

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks so much Brenda - I think!

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Michael

    Ben,
    A great tale of irony in many ways ( 'low' rather than 'high' ). All wrapped-up in a nice flowing rhyme scheme. M :)

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks, Michael. Yes, I was quite pleased with 'low' rather than 'high', lol

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Truth Bringer

    the title is a stroke of genius. good take on highwayman but the character is anything but of high moral. this is like one of the western movies with the cowboy hats and person walking into a bar and trying to settle their differences, this is really a movie in words. who would you have to play the character in real life?

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Jamie (Lia)

    Such a dark ending that honestly i didn't see coming at all. I absolutely love your writing when you seem to be more free. I personally think your best poems are when you write from either experience or put a personal touch within. This one seemed to have that honestly. It's a metaphor clearly but you put the reality in which you live now into it. The title captures the poem spot on. Although it's sort of a pun it works perfectly. You, as one of the people inside the poem itself is the one feeling low, and it seems by the end you gave up. So the sadness is consistent throughout which makes it a great read. And of course the rhyming is a nice touch because it flows well and doesn't interrupt anything. I see no glaring errors. Well done

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Great comment as usual, Jamie. Thank you.

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Em (marmite)

    I absolutely love your poetry Ben especially those, like these, that tell a story.

    Take care Ben, hope you and your family are well x

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks so much, Em. Family are all well and the wife is getting bigger by the day!

      All the best

  • 1 week ago

    by Star

    Once again I read this few days ago, but it was not the right to leave a comment.
    Rather than saying this is another great write by you I waited, till the poem sank in. And I understood why it may have been in the miscellaneous category, with that dark ending.

    This isn’t just a poem it’s more of a though a bad one, or perhaps a fear. Sometimes in a frightening moment where life look so beautiful, the thought comes across with a knife. What if? What if this life I am blessed with, shatters between my hands. What if and what if!

    Now this became real to me, and I could relate to it. Those thoughts and what ifs may be the reason of us going downhill.

    This is a terrifying poem!!
    (Just joking :)
    I may be way off, and if I am I’m sorry about that.

    Hope all is well!

    • 1 week ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks so much for your insight, STAR

  • 1 week ago

    by Daniel

    I love this! I read it in nick cave’s voice for some reason. A very well told story, and a very solid rhyme scheme.

    • 1 week ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Nick Cave and the Bad Seeds - brilliant band, Daniel. Thanks, good man.

  • 1 week ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    Your poetry does it eveytime.... leaves a smile on the face with the tale you have told that totally captivates! ! :D

    Love this one ..... BRAVOO Ben!! ;)

    • 1 week ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Olwin. Hope you're keeping well.

  • 1 week ago

    by Truth Bringer

    congratulations

  • 1 week ago

    by Michael

    Well done Ben :)

  • 1 week ago

    by Star

    Every type of poetry you write is good in its own way!! Congratulations Ben :)

    • 1 week ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, STAR - lovely of you to say so.