and froze

by Ben Pickard   Nov 11, 2019


as the promise of my
eternal love condensed
softly on your glasses,
winter's breath stole
through the chambers
of your failing heart
and froze

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Ben Pickard

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  • 9 months ago

    by Star

    Judging Comment:

    Although the poem is short, it feels like a sudden thought turned into a genius write. We feel like the promises did not go through to the other person. And love has lost its way in the tough winter.

  • 1 year ago

    by Tanya Southey

    Mmmmmmh! Yes! I am currently going through a rollercoaster with my mother's health and this is so true.

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks for reading, Tanya. I am sorry to hear of your mother's ill health.

  • 1 year ago

    by Star

    I love how you always surprise us with your writes. This is so beautiful!!

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks, Star. That means a lot.
      All the best as ever

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Ben, you never cease to amaze me with your words, this is just beautiful.

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks so much, Brenda. Glad you enjoyed.

  • 1 year ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    What can one possibly say after reading this? I wanted to exhale after reading this, something intimate yet bittersweet. Though I wasn't sure if "winter's breath stole THROUGH" was the most eloquent way to phrase it (I really haven't heard "stole through" used before though), I enjoyed the brevity as it's something different than I'm used to seeing from you. The "and froze" being the ending lines, two words, that capture an ending. A breath halted, and you're left in the wake of the memories.

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks, MA and thank you for the honesty. You made me wonder about it but I'm fairly sure it's a turn of phrase as in to do something sneakily/quickly/quietly. Take care and all the best as ever.

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